The Red Dragon

[Neki]

Ok, so I submitted a new character named Shinrah Marr. I am writing some of her story because she is completely awesome and stuff. This is just little bits and pieces of herlife.. Anyway, so ya. here we go.


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The Jar[/glow]


Shinrah moved silently through the house. She knew the Warden was in the other room, and she didn't want to get caught. The kictchen was just a little further, the large door the only obstacle. She pushed the heavy door forward, oiled hinges gliding silently. She smiled to herself. It would be an easy steal today.
Shinrah silently moved forward intot he blue colored kitchen. It was large, with a table big enough for all fourteen of the kids to sit at. The older kids ate in different parts of the house, but the fourteen young ones all sat here. She was the oldest of them. Taking a chair, Shinrah slid it to the cubboards. She knew there was a jar up there with money in it. She was going to take that money. She was a crafty nine year old, getting into trouble. The other day she had duct taped one of the other boys to a chair and left him in the rain. Concentrate on the task at hand She told herself. She reached upward and grasped the jer. It was smooth, about the size of a jar of peanut butter. She smiled an evil smile and put the chair back.
" What are you doing Shinrah?" The girl turned to see the warden facing her. Two of the others stood behind him. She cursed them silently, and hid the jar behind her back.
" Absolutely nothing at the moment. Just sitting in the sun." It would have been a convincing lie if the Warden had not seen her move the chair, or seen the jar of money in her hands.
" Oh Shinrah. I thought you could change. I see I was misguided." The warden shook his head. He put his hand out for the jar. Shinrah handed it over with a sour face, green grey eyes boring into the two standing near the door.
" Leave Shinrah. Don't come back. I don't care how old you are. Just go. You'll be able to survive out there." The warden moved away into the other room, leaving the wooden door swinging on its hinges. Shinrah let out a frustrated grumble.

She went to her bed and grabbed the few things she would need. The money she had hidden, the knife she had stolen from the bazaar. She moved silently through the house and outside. Thre were a milluion oppurtunities out here, and she would take advantage of every one of them. They would regret this.

[Altairas]

Love the story. I think that for a nine year old a nine year old to be that sneaky and ninja like is a bit unlikely. I got a bit confused with the sitting in the sun part. She was in the kitchen right? I don't know it just didn't make sense.

[Neki]

Thats the whole point. She was lying. Anyway, heres the next part.




[glow=red,2,300]Gangworks[/glow]


Three years after Shinrah is kicked out..........


It was raining out, a cold wet day. Few people were out on the streets, most curled around warm fires or some such thing. A young girl was out on the streets, peering into house windows, looking for an empty house. Shinrah Marr was planning her next attack. She needed more money, and the easiest way to get it was stealing.
The next house was dark, and she decided this was where she would go. Taking a pice of metal from her belt, she picked the lock. It wasn't well made, and quickly gave in to her wishes. The inside was very dark, but it smelled of people and Shinrah could tell someone lived there. She moved further into the house, wanting to find something of value. She didn't see anything readily at hand, and she knew she shouldn't stay in one place too long.
The dark house creaked as she moved around, looking for anything. Tonight wasn't her night. With a grumble, Shinrah abandoned the search and started back.

There was a noise ahead of her, and Shinrah stopped. Someone was in the house, moving, turning on lights. She heard voices, many of them. She counted the different sounds she heard, noting at least ten voices if not more. Ten angry voices.

" Someone's been here. The lock was picked. Someone was here Darren." That was the loudest voice. It was a high thin voice, a woman.

" Silla, quiet. Don't worry." A man. He had a dark, calm voice. Shinrah peered at the people from behind the large plant she had taken refuge behind. The woman was tall and thin, light skin seeming to glow. The man was tall too, hair dark. He gave of a calm aura, almost as if he knew Shinrah was there.

" Spread out. Someone is still here." There was a shuffling of feet as the people spread out. The man and Silla moved out of the room, leaving others to search it. There was movement near Shinrah, and the plant leaves parted.

" Her Darren! I found the little sneak." The man shouted. He grabbed the collar of Shinrah jacket and shoved her into the middle of the room.

" Hey, watch it!" The girl protested, striking the mans hand as she was let go. One of the feew useful things she had learned on the streets was fighting. I doubt that'll help me now. What, one twelve year old against how many of them? Now fair. Not even red eco will help here. She cursed under her breath, unhappy.

The man and woman walked into the room, watching Shinrah.
" So little Minx, what are you doing here?" The woman asked in a snide tone. Darren moved his hand over to her and she quieted. Shinrah looked at the two of them, watching them. She was unsure about what was going to happen, and didn't like the fact she had no escape.

" What do you think?" She replied with a sneer to match Sella's. She gave a sarcastic smile towards the older woman. Darrens eyes twinkled as he watched her play the womans emotions. Thee was something funny about him, and she knew it.

" Little girl, do you know who I am?" He asked her.
" Should I?" Shinrah replied. She gave a snort. " Fire and Rain! I just wanted to steal some money. Now I've got to deal with a snippy lady and some tall scary guy? What5 next, the sky falling on my head?" Her voice dripped with sarcasm, and Sella moved as if to strike the girl. Shinrah ducked, putting her footout to trip the woman. She then went and sat on her, smiling.

" And you were saying?" The man laughed.
" Darren Hollis. The Shadow Snake." He said it as if it beared great importance, and it did.

" Ooops." Shinrah said. Danm. I didn't realize I'd be breaking into the nest of the local gang. Thats bad for me. And I didn't even get any money. She stood up, moving away from the woman.
" Ummm, I'll be going now. Sorry." She moved as if to leave, but Darren stopped her.

" I don't think so girlie. You're in my territory. You're staying here, with us. You might even turn out to be useful someday. " The man gave a wide smile and Shinrah knew she was in big trouble.

[Altairas]

Try breaking it into better paragraphs it was really hard to distinguish who was talking. But any who I don't get written sarcasm very well without the aid of a sarcastic tone. -scratches head-I give the evil girl props for sitting on the lady. ^___^

[Neki]

Thanks guys! I really appreciate your comments. I'm writing the nextpart tongiht. It has to do with my next character. His name is Jaythen, and he is very involved in thw hole history of everyone. Shinrah, Leo, Evey, ...... ya. He knows alot of people. Anywho, I will post it. And I am going to start writing for Jaythen too, so look for my next character story!