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Post by Tatsu on Oct 19, 2010 1:35:41 GMT -5
Please post critic, comments, replies, whatever here. I don't care what it is as long as it is going to the story Thinking.
Thank you, and do please Critic!
Edit: Also for Insane.
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Neki
EcoGrid Master
Just a Doll in a Belfry
Posts: 683
RP Characters: Mykah Mikelle, Shinrah Marr, Lyr Ballamy
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Post by Neki on Oct 19, 2010 8:28:48 GMT -5
Ok, here for Critiqueing!
Insane:
I really loved this story. The concept is great, and the way you played it out is amazing. I love the mind set the main character has. Full of an insane love that will never rest.
Thinking:
Deep thoughts. hmmmmmm, I really liked that. I liked how you didn't clarify who you were thinking, or just exactly what was so important about them other than making you laugh and smile. It drew tme in, and I was captures by the phrasing and language usage. I have to say that this is my favorite of the two.
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Post by Tatsu on Oct 19, 2010 13:17:16 GMT -5
X3 thankies Neki! I worked semi hard on em XD I was tired at the time and depressed for no reason... so I decided to give my writing a testin and I love Thinking! That ones like... XD
Because its like everyone catches themselves in deep thought and doesnt realize they are off guard and then blam XD.
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Post by dbkillerex on Oct 19, 2010 14:36:44 GMT -5
T.T.... "Thinking" made me sad.... Lets talk 'bout it later
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Post by Tatsu on Oct 22, 2010 21:59:38 GMT -5
XD wonderful talk XP
I am thinking of writing one more story, and this one will be bloody, or possibly super natural XP.
I am in the process of writing it now, so be on look out!
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